since i arrived America , things don't work out as i thought, which really smash my dreams up instead of fun. it's not fun and easy to get alone, instead, more kind of hollow , obscure and hard. those first days are really a catastrophe.
my claim: i can adapt myself to this different life.
grounds: in fact, this days, i made friends with senior students, they seems to have been the same situations where i have been. but look at them now , they have their own positions in this society and their life is happy. which prove that people can shift their behave due to the changing circumstance. and finally get along with things , taking control of your life.
warrant : we have been to the same situation, we talked about that, and we have the same background. some of them even were worse than me at that time . so , they can do it , why can't i ?
backing: the ability of adapting new things. i have moved to another city when i had my high school . they have different local language. however, i got used to it and made many friends. made things all right.
qualification: there are obstructions of language, when i was in my hometown , things as taking initiative and expand my network is easy for me . i feel i can control myself , however, here i feel , when conversation triggered , it's like my mouth is not mine. something i tried to express turn to things different and conversation gets awkward. however, i see if how those senior chinese student cope with this, using simple practice. be confident to express and take practice. those are real examples occured in front of my eyes.so practice more i beilieve things will get better.
Very clear Toulmin structure! As far as I know, the grounds, warrants, and backing should be supported by one another, and your reasoning meet that criteria! And I think the qualification part will get even better if you put your judgment that "I can adapt eventually trough practice" in the beginning of that part, because that gives readers an idea what will be presented next.
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ReplyDeleteExcellent work. Your blog illustrates well the principle of toulmin structure! Since all the elements, the ground, warrant, claim, backing and qualification support and connect each other in a powerful way, your article is persuasive. As far as I see, in my point of view, the content is clear and strongly connected, so there is no need to change it. By the way, it is better to use capital letters in front of your each sentence. This will looks more formal.
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Xiangyu Chen
Your toulmin's model has nice structure and comprehensive analysis. As a Chinese international student, I have the same feeling. We must spend more time adapting the circumstance here.
ReplyDeleteYou demonstrate all toulmin's model elements detailed and you have done a nice job in connecting all elements as a whole. In my opinion, you can write more about how can we adapt as soon as possible. (By talking, interacting with local students, getting to know each other)
Nice structure and analysis again.